Short Story - Fantasy - The Emerald of Secrets, Pt. 3

This one is gonna be really quick.

At some point in what I believe was my freshman year in high school, I tried writing The Emerald of Secrets again. This time, I made the subtitle The Protector, planning to make the seven gems guarding one abstract concept in the fairy world.

I aged Christy and Trish up to make them in high school, though Christy was a freshman and Trish a sophomore. They met in their geometry class and had a brief conversation in class. You can really tell that I was in a deep Hamilton phase. Christy was a history buff while Trish was really into the musical, which did relatively align with how they were in the previous draft, though Trish was more interesting in fantasy. If I were to revamp this idea, I think Trish would go back to her fairy tale roots.

I also changed it so Christy was extremely introverted and shy. She met "David" much earlier, and he led her to her class. After her geometry class, Trish led Christy to her next class, where they ran into Trish's friend Adeline. These four characters all have lunch together, and that's all I have written if this draft.

I think I mainly hit a writer's block or moved on to work more with The Secret Portal. With only two chapters, there's nothing substantial about this draft, especially since I hadn't even introduced the magic yet. What makes this draft really weird though is that I decided to make it in first person, while everywhere else it's in third. The first chapter was in Christy's perspective, then I went to Trish's for the second. I really don't like it, and I don't know why. I get a certain feeling with first and third person and when I feel like it should be used, and to me, The Emerald of Secrets has the vibe of being in third person.

I think at this point in time, I was planning on making everything I wrote in first person, but that's definitely not the case. I think I actually prefer writing in third person, but I will write in first person when I feel like the story needs to, like in The Secret Portal, although that's caused me to do so much work with the multiple perspectives to get voice down, that I think I'll reserve first person for only when it's absolutely needed and focused on only one person.

I wish I'd written more of this draft, but alas. Tomorrow, we will actually get to the short stories I wrote for my creative classing.

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